Post by Etheric on Feb 28, 2007 10:24:22 GMT -5
Below, two example character submssions will be posted.
Azmi Etui
Race: Anthropomorphic - tiger
Age: 20
Phys: Strong build, naturally fast and agile, hair changes colors from orange-red to orange.
Ment: Usually a quiet loner, he's not the type to initiate conversation with anyone lest it be for his own amusement. Recent events of his life have led to him achieving a somewhat more sociable personality.
Fight: His style relies more on speed and wit, and can easily be defeated by someone with more experience in lightning speed fighting styles. He's also claustrophobic.
Further details withheld for the purpsose of story.
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The above submission is an example of a BAD post. While it has some significant information and is well written, it is too simple as yet.
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Azmi Ouki Etui
An anthropomorphic tiger, Azmi has a sleek muscular build. Orange fur with black stripes are shielded with loose, light grey pants and t-shirt. Two curved swords of differing lengths rest at either hip and small pouch of shuriken is tied near each of them. A blue cape rests on his shoulders and a strip of cloth the same color is tied beneath his hair along his forehead.
Azmi was put into the military at age 15 by his parents, against his will. He was trained as an assassin there, until he plotted and successfully deserted his position three years later, joining an assassin guild based in The Outpost. He was recently tracked down and arrested.
As a trained assassin, Azmi's style of combat is dependent on stealth and speed, not strength. He is alert, observant, and quick, but has no hand in any contest of strength. Azmi is also mundane as well, having no magical abilities at all. He has a deep and natural fear of deep water and small, confined spaces.
A soul with a dream, Azmi is not one to talk about his past without prompt. His profession was one of lies and deception, so excluding the truth or distorting it is something he is an expert at.
Azmi Etui
Race: Anthropomorphic - tiger
Age: 20
Phys: Strong build, naturally fast and agile, hair changes colors from orange-red to orange.
Ment: Usually a quiet loner, he's not the type to initiate conversation with anyone lest it be for his own amusement. Recent events of his life have led to him achieving a somewhat more sociable personality.
Fight: His style relies more on speed and wit, and can easily be defeated by someone with more experience in lightning speed fighting styles. He's also claustrophobic.
Further details withheld for the purpsose of story.
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The above submission is an example of a BAD post. While it has some significant information and is well written, it is too simple as yet.
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Azmi Ouki Etui
An anthropomorphic tiger, Azmi has a sleek muscular build. Orange fur with black stripes are shielded with loose, light grey pants and t-shirt. Two curved swords of differing lengths rest at either hip and small pouch of shuriken is tied near each of them. A blue cape rests on his shoulders and a strip of cloth the same color is tied beneath his hair along his forehead.
Azmi was put into the military at age 15 by his parents, against his will. He was trained as an assassin there, until he plotted and successfully deserted his position three years later, joining an assassin guild based in The Outpost. He was recently tracked down and arrested.
As a trained assassin, Azmi's style of combat is dependent on stealth and speed, not strength. He is alert, observant, and quick, but has no hand in any contest of strength. Azmi is also mundane as well, having no magical abilities at all. He has a deep and natural fear of deep water and small, confined spaces.
A soul with a dream, Azmi is not one to talk about his past without prompt. His profession was one of lies and deception, so excluding the truth or distorting it is something he is an expert at.